Feedback for Emily on Evaluation

Emily - a lot of what I said to Shaun also applies to you so please read his feedback post and implement the changes I suggested.
You need to make it clear that you are answering the questions one by one.
Start by outlining the conventions of an indie music video, cite some of the examples you looked at and then discuss your own use of those conventions, illustrated by examples. You could benefit from discussing in a bit more detail the conventions of your ancillary texts and which ones you used and any you challenged or developed.
Also you say didn't when I think you meant did in the following section
"After looking at other bands magazine adverts and digipaks there was some information we didn’t need to include"
You need to fix that because it doesn't make sense as it stands.
You need to flesh out your responses to the question on feedback and use of new media technology.